雅思寫作真題高分範文分享：犯罪是人性使然嗎?

題目

Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think the human nature produces crimes? And how can we prevent children from growing up to be criminals? (2020/8/15)

解析&審題

題材：犯罪

題型：混合題型

關(guan) 鍵詞：human nature + crime + children

需要討論的觀點：犯罪是天性使然嗎？如何阻止孩子長大後犯罪？

建議思路：雙邊討論+解決(jue) 辦法

複現情況：與(yu) 2014年11月8日部分重複

關(guan) 於(yu) “crime”（犯罪）的雅思寫(xie) 作真題：

1. Some think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Other believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. （2014/11/8）犯罪是由貧窮還是天性引起？

2. Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? （2015/4/25）青少年犯重罪是否應該與(yu) 成年人同等懲罰？

3. The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the level of violent crime in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?（2017/5/20）減少影視暴力能降低社會(hui) 犯罪率嗎？（點擊閱讀老雅範文）

4. In many countries, prison is the most common solution to the problem of crime. However, another effective way is to provide people with higher education so that they can not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?（2018/3/3）解決(jue) 犯罪的最好辦法是監獄還是教育？（點擊閱讀老雅範文）

5. The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. Do you agree or disagree? （2019/10/10）降低青少年犯罪的唯一辦法是提高父母教育孩子的技巧嗎？（點擊閱讀老雅範文）

人類天性是什麽(me) ？這個(ge) 問題從(cong) 來就沒有什麽(me) 標準答案，也不會(hui) 有標準答案。在中國文化中，有孟子的“性本善”和韓非子的“性本惡”兩(liang) 類觀點，西方世界受基督教的影響，多相信人一出生就帶有“原罪”(original sin）。本題問：你在何種程度上同意人的天性會(hui) 讓人犯罪（produce crimes)？對於(yu) 這個(ge) 問題，我們(men) 可以一分為(wei) 二地思考：人類天性中的確有很多不好的因素，比如貪婪、嫉妒（這些因素在很小的孩子身上都能看到），這些東(dong) 西不加控製，的確會(hui) 造成犯罪。但這並意味著所有人長大後都會(hui) 變成罪犯，因為(wei) 不好的天性是可以通過教育來加以控製的。

沿著這個(ge) 思路，我們(men) 就可以回答題目中的第二個(ge) 問題了：讓孩子明白犯罪的後果，給孩子營造安全和諧的家庭和社會(hui) 環境，控製人性中的惡的一麵，發揚人性中的善的一麵，這樣，就可以避免孩子長大後犯罪了。

高分範文

Many people link crimes to bad human nature. They believe that, by observing the behavior of a three-year-old child, they can accurately predict whether the child will grow up to be a criminal. But I think this idea is rather too simplistic.

It is indeed true that there are some bad elements in human nature which manifest themselves in small children’s behaviour and later may lead to crimes when they grow up. Many children, for instance, are aggressive because they are always trying to get more from their parents or other people around them. If they are not satisfied, they may attack others verbally or even physically. Such is human nature that we always ask for more than is necessary for us, which, if not brought well under control, will make us greedy and eventually lead us all the way to prison.

The reality, however, is that even so, most children have become law-abiding citizens when they grow up. This is because, while bad human nature does have a role to play in making a person anti-social, there are many other equally important factors which will make him think twice before committing crimes. Those who are educated enough to tell right from wrong, and those who are wealthy enough or enjoy a social status high enough are least likely to become criminals.

In order to prevent children from getting involved in criminal acts, therefore, we first need to provide them with opportunities to receive a good education, then they will learn to check their unwanted desires or to realize their ambitions through legal means. Besides, if they lived in a peaceful and friendly environment, small children would learn how to love others, which will greatly reduce the likelihood of their becoming criminals as they move into adulthood.

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老師筆記

Many people link crimes to bad human nature. They believe that, by observing the behavior of a three-year-old child, they can accurately predict whether the child will grow up to be a criminal. But I think this idea is rather too simplistic.

許多人把犯罪與(yu) 糟糕的人性聯係起來。他們(men) 認為(wei) ，通過觀察一個(ge) 三歲的孩子的行為(wei) ，就可以準確地預測孩子長大後是否會(hui) 成為(wei) 罪犯。但我認為(wei) 這個(ge) 想法有點過於(yu) 簡單化了。

（1）本段開門見山，通過改寫(xie) 題目中的表達方式來重述題目，然後給出自己的觀點。

（2）Link A to B 把A和B聯係起來

（3）Accurately 準確地

（4）Simplistic 簡單化的

It is indeed true that there are some bad elements in human nature which manifest themselves in small children’s behaviour and later may lead to crimes when they grow up. Many children, for instance, are aggressive because they are always trying to get more from their parents or other people around them. If they are not satisfied, they may attack others verbally or even physically. Such is human nature that we always ask for more than is necessary for us, which, if not brought well under control, will make us greedy and eventually lead us all the way to prison.

的確，人性中有一些不良因素，這些不良因素表現在小孩子的行為(wei) 中，並在後來可能可能導致他們(men) 長大後犯罪。例如，許多孩子具有攻擊性，因為(wei) 他們(men) 總是試圖從(cong) 父母或周圍的其他人那裏得到更多。如果他們(men) 沒有得到滿足，就可能會(hui) 語言上甚至身體(ti) 上攻擊別人。這就是人類的天性，我們(men) 總是想得到比自己需要的更多，如果不能很好地控製，這個(ge) 天性會(hui) 讓我們(men) 變得貪婪，最終把我們(men) 帶到監獄。

（1）本段先承認：人類有些天性會(hui) 導致我們(men) 犯罪。

（2）Manifest 顯現；顯示

（3）Aggressive 有攻擊性的

（4）Verbally 語言上地

（5）Such is human nature that...  ......是人類天性

（6）Bring...under control 將......控製好

（7）Eventually 最終

The reality, however, is that even so, most children have become law-abiding citizens when they grow up. This is because, while bad human nature does have a role to play in making a person anti-social, there are many other equally important factors which will make him think twice before committing crimes. Those who are educated enough to tell right from wrong, and those who are wealthy enough or enjoy a social status high enough are least likely to become criminals.

然而，即使如此，現實卻是大多數兒(er) 童長大後都成為(wei) 了守法公民。這是因為(wei) ，雖然壞的人性確實可以讓一個(ge) 人變得反社會(hui) ，但還有許多其他同樣重要的因素會(hui) 使他在犯罪前三思而後行。那些受過足夠教育能分辨是非的人，那些足夠富有的人，那些享有足夠高社會(hui) 地位的人，沒有什麽(me) 可能成為(wei) 罪犯。

(1) 本段轉折過來：討論人性並不一定導致人們(men) 犯罪，因為(wei) 還有其他因素讓人們(men) 不犯罪。

(2) Law-abiding citizens 守法的公民

(3) Anti-social 反社會(hui) 的

(4) Think twice 三思，謹慎

(5) Be least likely to do... 不太可能做......

In order to prevent children from getting involved in criminal acts when they grow up, therefore, we first need to provide them with opportunities to receive a good education, then they will learn to check their unwanted desires or to realize their ambitions through legal means. Besides, if they lived in a peaceful and friendly environment, small children would learn how to love others, which will greatly reduce the likelihood of their becoming criminals as they move into adulthood.

因此，為(wei) 了防止兒(er) 童長大後卷入犯罪行為(wei) ，我們(men) 首先要給他們(men) 提供接受良好教育的機會(hui) ，這樣他們(men) 能學會(hui) 抑製自己不必要的欲望，或者學會(hui) 通過合法手段實現自己的誌向。此外，如果小孩子們(men) 生活在一個(ge) 和平友好的環境中，他們(men) 就能學會(hui) 如何去愛別人，這將大大降低他們(men) 進入成年後成為(wei) 罪犯的可能性。

（1）本段提出方法：給孩子提供教育機會(hui) ；給孩子營造友好和平的環境。注意，這裏的兩(liang) 條建議是用兩(liang) 種不同句式表達的。

（2）Get involved in... 卷入......

（3）Provide sb. with... 給......提供......

（4）Check 控製；抑製

（5）Reduce the likelihood of... 降低......的可能性

（6）Move into adulthood 進入成年