托福學術討論寫作 第一套官方樣題解析和範文

在前幾天，官方公布了新托福考試的模考樣題和全新的考試界麵。

?托福官方推出免費模考練習(xi) ！幫助還未參加考試的同學了解新的考試頁麵和流程。 除此，所以模考練習(xi) 都附有評分和解析。

趁著這個(ge) 機會(hui) ，老師也第一時間去練習(xi) 了其中的第一套官方樣題和評分。因為(wei) 正好這套題，官方沒有給寫(xie) 作範文，隻是給了寫(xie) 作建議和思路。

題目是：

As I mentioned in class, governments make public policies to describe their responses to various problems that affect a community. Part of this process involves setting and defending priorities about which issues deserve the most attention and resources. For example, governments need to decide whether they should spend more money on education or on environmental protections. If you were a policy maker, which issue would you argue is more important-education or environmental protections? Why?

對於(yu) 這個(ge) 題目，官方的建議是：

1. 可以同意Andrew的觀點和思路：教育比環境更重要，但是要給出a meaningful addition.

"If you agree with Andrew that education should be the bigger priority, you could add to his argument by pointing out the amount of research that universities conduct—not only on solving environmental problems, which Andrew alluded to, but also on treating diseases, creating useful technology, and developing sustainable agriculture. Therefore, education funding has a bigger overall impact on improving human lives than investment in environmental protections only. This would be a meaningful addition to the support Andrew provided for his opinion."

⭕️這是官方提供的一種擴展的思路,並不是唯一一種寫(xie) 法.

2. 也可以同意Kelly的觀點：教育比環境更重要，但是給出不同的support.

"You might agree with Kelly that environmental protections should be the priority. You will need to add your own support for this viewpoint."

3. 當然你也可以認為(wei) ,kelly說得有道理，但還是覺得教育更重要。-->這就是傳(chuan) 統的讓步轉折觀點。

"You may find you agree with a point Kelly made about the environment even though you think education is more important."

4. 或者你提出一個(ge) 完全不同的觀點。

"Or you might even find that your opinion about government priorities depends on certain factors—that education should be a priority in some circumstances, environmental protections in others."

所以，從(cong) 中大家可以很明確地看出來，官方對大家觀點的選擇的自由度放得很寬。其次，對於(yu) 什麽(me) 是make a contriution to the discussion 也做了解釋。隻要是解釋和支撐了自己的觀點，沒跑題，都可以，都是參與(yu) 了討論。

"There is no “correct” answer to the question. The important part of this task is to make sure that you state your opinion and provide reasonable, relevant support for it in a way that makes a meaningful contribution to the online discussion."

所以，老師就限時寫(xie) 了一篇:環境更重要的作文，得分是5分.

現在修改一些小的語法，調整了一下句子結構和連貫後的作文。

參加過老師寫(xie) 作團的同學應該覺得很眼熟，從(cong) 中看到老師講過結構和表達。

I am inclined to agree with Kelly’s viewpoint that governments should prioritize environmental protections over education. While education has shouldered the responsibility to cultivate our next generation, the importance pales in the comparison with the urgence of environmental protections. Nowadays the environment issues are too severe to wait for another generation to tackle. Consider Global Warming. Last year, a ferocious heat wave swept acrosee Europe. This unprecedented event resulted in multiple extreme heat warnings and, tragically, the loss of thousands of lives, particularly among vulnerable groups who lacked resources. A catastrophe would have been avoided if people had not beeing burning such large amounts of fossil fuels, which have significantly increased carbon dioxide levels, contributing to global temperature rise. Therefore, if governments still take the environmental protection secondary, turning a blind eye to these phenomena, there may not be many more generations left to educate. In conclusion, when faced with the alarmingly life-threatening environment degradation, it is more urgent and indispensable that governments prioritize environmental protection, providing a safe and sustainable world for education to thrive.(176字)